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Review:CambAngst says:
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This was really fascinating. Very unique and far-removed from the vast majority of Next Gen fics on HPFF. In a relatively short space, you've built up a very interesting, well-defined and rather frightening main character. The seething rage and aggression that fills her is almost tangible the way that you write it. The violence she inflicts on those around her doesn't seem born out of any particular affliction that I can pick out. She simply hurts people because she likes hurting them. She likes the feeling of power that it gives her. You're doing a terrific job of avoiding all of the usual cliches so far.

Her pursuit of the first-year boy that she eventually jinxes had me more than a bit convinced that she was a werewolf. There was a very primal feeling to that section. The blending of sights and sounds and sensations was very vivid and a clever way to paint the scene in the reader's mind. Then to discover that it's all about something as silly as a quill -- or perhaps even more frighteningly that it isn't really about a quill at all -- made her seem even more raw and sadistic. I loved it, really.

It seems like she has an equal and opposite of sorts -- at least a worthy nemesis -- in Albus Potter. That sets the stage for a lot of very interesting confrontations. In the end, it seems that she gets the better of him, although not without considerable effort. And she's good with a knife, which immediately made me think of Sollozzo in the Godfather for some strange reason. For his part, Al was a different sort of intimidating presence to me. Confident, vaguely menacing but without the undertones of sadism and unnecessary violence. More refined, if you will. It's a very believable and somewhat traditional characterization for Harry's middle child.

The scene with the new History of Magic professor was brutally chilling. I loved the subtle aspect of her personality that her preference for ending Voldemort's life betrayed. The smoking teacher? Eh, honestly I think you could have been alright without that detail, but I definitely understand how you can sometimes get a picture of a scene in your mind and anything less just won't do. It didn't ruin anything for me.

Your writing was fantastic in this. Everything flowed beautifully and the abrupt nature of the dialog really complimented the mood. You used more profanity that I usually like in a story, but it didn't seem out of place at all. My hat is off to you. You're a great storyteller and a very good writer. I hope I get to read more of this!

Author's Response: Hello there! I'm awfully sorry at how long it's taken me to respond to this review *hangs head in shame*. Truth is, I wasn't sure how to! It's so brilliant and amazing and helpful, I didn't want to mess it up with a lame response.

But I'm facing my fears. xD

I'm really encourage by all the things you've been saying in this review, because it makes me feel that people are interpreting the story the way I wanted them to, and not getting the wrong end of the stick.

Yes, Lila is addicted to power. She has to be in control all the time, she has to let out the rage that constantly consumes her - and she does this by hurting others. She's a horrible, evil character and is so much fun to write.

Well, the werewolf aspect comes into her characterisation slightly as well. Of course, it's not very plausible for her to be more than a TINY bit animalistic/feral, seeing as her mum wasn't even bitten properly, but I'd like to imagine that some of the raw primal instincts have filtered down to her.

Hmm... if I'm honest with you Albus's character sort of sprung into shape of its own accord. I don't have any clear guidelines as to the way he should act, which I'm certainly working on. But I like the way you perceived him! :)

I have quite a bit planned for the history of magic teacher!

I'm truly honoured to get such an amazing, flattering review from you. I can't thank you enough for the time and trouble you took to do this for me!

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