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Review:caoty says:
I'm quite fond of pink hair, as it happens. :P

Anyway. That's got nothing to do with the review. Erm. So.

I can't begin to tell you how happy I am that Tam's cut to the chase and just kissed the guy already. If more fic did that, then there would be a lot less novels and a lot more one-shots. Thank you for doing that, I really appreciate it, just a breath of fresh air.
And I like Tam, too - she isn't omg-so-snarky like so many othe OCs, but she still has a sense of humour.

Your Next Gen kids are also well-thought-out characters, which is sadly rare in fic, so well done there.

Your Britishisms are very good, too, but you've still got a bit of Americanism in there, and maybe these sentences:
>I hate when she makes sense. So I blew her a raspberry. Just because I could.
could've been two sentences rather than three, 'cause short sentences like that place a lot of emphasis on what is happening - so they're usually used in mystery or horror - and there isn't a lot happening there.
Maybe I'm just nitpicky, but still.

Anyway, happy writing, and I'll see you around. :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for your review! =)

Yeah, quite many fanfics seem to be more focused on how to make characters kiss each other than how to cultivate a plot. And since I like to revolt against any existing tropes that I find, I decided to mix things up a bit. =)

I'm glad you like my characters. I'm quite fond of them myself. They are my gang. =P

Thanks for pointing out the issues. I'll try to find those Americanisms, but they can be quite sneaky ones and try to hide from me.


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