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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Yay! An update! YES!

I must admit the opening of the chapter was my favourite part - how you described Remus's shock and fear at seeing the Dark Mark. Even though I knew Tonks wasn't dead (because that would be non-canon) you managed to suspend my disbelief for a moment, where I actually felt the fear Remus did, that she was indeed dead. That was just a great piece of writing and was my absolute favourite part by a country mile!

I also liked that you started to show Tonks's fear of motherhood in this chapter, where the reality of what is going to happen presses down upon her and she is just scared that she will be a bad mum or that she will drop the baby. Though I have no experience whatsoever in this area, it does seem very realistic to me anyway!

I also thought it was really sweet that they now can feel a sort of tremour, even if the baby is still too young to start kicking, that was just really nice anyway, and how that little thing defused the whole situation, flooding them with his powerful happy feeling. That was great.

I also liked the ending and the idea of the first snow fall. Snow is quite a special thing where I come from, because we so rarely have it and when we do it's so beautiful and exciting and I just loved your final paragraph. It was truly fantastic and such a great piece of descriptive writing.

Anyway, very well done again, and I can't wait for more so please do update soon! :-)

Author's Response: thank you so much! and i'm hoping to get the next chapter up soon.

yeah, i always thought that what with tonks' proclivity for clumsiness, she'd feel insecure about it and how it would make her do something to hurt the baby. i've been doing reading on pregnancy and such and most expectant mothers start to get a bit anxious during that time as the full weight of what's happening really hits them.

and i'm glad you liked the bit with the snowfall. it's a bit poignant now, because we know that everything, like the first snowfall, is the last time they'll experience it before the Battle of Hogwarts, which was what i was kind of driving at, they're commitment to living life while they can. :_(

Anyway, can't wait to read more of Door into the Dark, and thank you so much for the awesome review, as always. :D


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