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Review:CambAngst says:
What a great chapter for my dear Pansy! I was worrying about her a bit after the last one. Seems that my worries were not exactly misplaced, but maybe just not focused quite right.

First off, I loved the way you wrote this chapter. The very slow way that you built up all of the big moments of revelation made it feel like time was standing still at points, which I'm sure is exactly how it would have felt to Pansy. Her mind is just spinning during her conversation with Mr. Craddle, full of anxiety and obsessively analyzing every bit of his behavior. He seems like the nervous, fidgety type. You did a great job with all of the little details like the way his fingers give away his nervousness and his general desire to get back to his paperwork. He honestly doesn't seem like much of a manager.

At several points while I was reading this, it dawned on me that Pansy's upbringing has become a handicap of sorts for her. It's strangely ironic that the very breeding that would have served her so well if Voldemort had won the war almost qualifies as a disability now. For me, that thought played really nicely with the idea of the Ministry not tolerating any forms of prejudice. I'm not sure whether you meant for it to work out that way, but it just clicked in my head and now I can't let go of the idea for some reason.

You ended this chapter on such a positive note for Pansy. It almost feels like she can see the light at the end of her long, dark tunnel. She's realizing that she needs social interaction with other people to be happy. She sometimes smiles for no reason and it doesn't hurt her face. I'm sure that you have more hurdles planned for her, but the progress here was tangible and I really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Gosh- I really seem to be falling behind on answering reviews now. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to respond! I do really appreciate your reviews!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter. Yes, Mr Craddle isn't the best manager but he does have good intentions and that's better than nothing. As well, he's not exactly overwhelmed by his responsibilities as manager of the Archives - it's nothing like being Head Auror.

Poor Pansy is restricted behind the beliefs of her upbringing, beliefs that were suited to Voldemort's reign and not to his defeat. You're absolutely right in that they are hindering her progress and what's worse is that she isn't quite aware of the fact that they are a handicap.

The end of the chapter is such a huge moment for Pansy and you'll see the event in the next chapter. But you're right in that there are more hurdles in her path - I can tell you right now that the next one will arrive in 2 chapters and it will be a doozy.

Thanks once again for reviewing! I always enjoy reading your comments!

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