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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello! Here from the Review Tag :)

This is a fantastic character study of Neville. You portray his emotional and psychological state vividly, along with his vulnerability and the general oppressive atmosphere of the school under the Carrows' control. The psychological buildup to Neville's epiphany is completely believable and realistic. Wonderful ending.

I would pay close attention to some of the generalised statements included in your writing. For example:

The growth of character had gone completely unnoticed by the rest of the class

This line is quite unnecessary, as the reader is already aware of this (you've spent the entire paragraph before the sentence writing Neville's thoughts and internal discussions). Also, it's a little clunky and I think your story would be much better without it.

But all in all, this is a great piece of writing. I really enjoyed it :) Good work!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I will definitely have a look through the piece for these sorts of things. Thanks for pointing it out :D

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