Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
My first thought after reading this chapter was poor Penny. I'm still in a state of denial regarding the fact that Sirius never showed up. How could you do this?

Plot- I loved the plot. This chapter certainly adds an unforeseen twist to the plot. I was at least expecting Sirius to show up!

Grammar- Again, I didn't notice any mistakes.

Characterization- I'm a little confused about Sirius' characterization. From the previous chapters, I received the impression that he had feelings for Penny. However, this chapter seemed a bit contradictory, implying that Sirius could care less about Penny. I was also a little confused with Remus' appearance, as well. It seemed a bit unnecessary, and, if anything, merely filler. Additionally, why did Penny have a complete mental break down in the common room? I thought that was a little strange.

Description- There wasn't a great deal of description in this chapter, but I enjoyed the small amount that was present. I don't think any more description is needed to convey the overall message of the chapter.

Dialogue- The dialogue was a little choppy and strained when Remus and Penny were talking. It was just an awkward exchange with no real purpose.

Overall, this was my least favorite chapter so far. Still, I can't wait to read the next chapter!

4/10

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 926
Submit Report: