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Review:caoty says:
Hey, I'm here with your requested review.

So. So. Suicide. Difficult subject, especially from the perspective of a loved one. Well done for attempting it; I don't think I could. And it's made me sad, which I assume is the purpose of this one-shot. So well done there.

I've got a couple of critiques for you, if you feel like touching this up at some point:
a) Harry's characterisation. He's pretty chilled out here, don't you think? I assume you're trying to characterise him as trying to be strong for his family, but Harry doesn't really seem like that kinda guy... I'm not saying he's going to start wailing and ripping his hair out or anything, but he'd be a bit quieter and a bit more on edge than usual.
b) This bit:
>"We have to be strong today, for Lily. You know she wouldn't want us to be upset." I told him. Al pulled away and I looked in his green eyes, "Just remember she'll always be with in our hearts."

It's a bit... cliched? The phrases Ginny's using, I mean. Turned an otherwise lovely and poignant moment into a bit of a Disney film, and 18-year-old Al ain't gonna fall for that.

Anyway, I hope this review wasn't completely terrible, and I'll see you around.

Author's Response: Heya,

Yep, I was trying to show him being strong, trying not to break down. I did think of writing him, sorta locking himself away and shutting people out (Kinda like when Sirius/Dumbledore Died) but I changed it last minute.

This review was not terrible but helpful. Thank you xx


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