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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
No James, don't do it!
I'm sorry I've messed up you perfect number of reviews (123) but after a great deal of screaming at the computer at James and Carlotta, I couldn't resist reviewing :)
Brilliant cliffhanger - this story is brilliant for those tense, insightful and gripping paragraphs that have you hooked.
I love the depth to James you add - most people don't bother when they're doing 1st person, but you make it os much more realistic by adding his thoughts, and description.
"A ringing silence fell upon the flat" that's awesome description of James's shock, and how it would've actually felt like.
You wrote the raging argument very well, explaining all of what it really would be like for Al and James - I love the original touch of Lily being a squib, an have done through out the whole story.
The whole story plot, is very well written, and well thought out - you are definitely pro at story writing.
The newspaper article is brillaintly portrayed too, and very newspaper-y, grabbing all the best gossip, exaggerating it, and the fickleness in it I thought was quite believable.
I love everything about this tory - from the title to the content to the characters, it's all fantastic and clever and witty!! :D

Author's Response: Please, don't apologise for leaving a review! I'm not that fussed about a perfect number :)

Writing in first person was a massive challenge at first, because I've always done third person before, but I decided that in this fic, first person would work better. It's tough at times because of course there are some things that James doesn't want to admit even to himself, but it's also easier to hold back things like daddy issues which is good ;)

Lily being a Squib is, if I do say so myself, my favourite of all the aspects of this fic. She manages to steal the show every time she features - I'm not sure whether this is good or bad! But it does have the added advantage of providing a contrast between her life and James and Albus' on the other hand. Glad you like it :)

The newspaper article was an utter pain to write! It took me about ten drafts to get right in the end, so I'm glad that it's convincing.

Thanks for reviewing! It's really nice to know that people are enjoying what I'm writing :)

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