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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hello! Back again with your second requested review :)

Your introduction is captivating, particularly when she says that it's like intruding on a moment between your body and its surroundings. Very nice.

I must have misread your last chapter; I thought Pomfrey was a patient in the narrator's hospital? Rather than the actual narrator herself? Or maybe Madam Elora was the narrator of the last chapter. I will have to go back and see what I misread! :)

It's very interesting to see the change of voice between the two chapters, in terms of how the different voices view the hospital. Nice touch!

I also like the recurrence of the thymus. Really wonderful imagination and working of canon with its ability to protect children and the way its abilities decrease as a child ages and begins expelling the magic from their body. It's interesting that you use symbolism in an obscure body organ. I'm not quite sure exactly what it stands for yet--I'll have to read the next chapter to find out ;)

This is absolutely stunning writing. I'm going to add it to my favorites list so that I can continue reading!

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