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Review:orangezauber says:
I suppose since I waited so long to pace myself through these chapters, I no longer have to wait. You have posted the ending of the story so I will be able to read to my heart's content.

Funnily enough, as soon as you mentioned the diary in this chapter it brought to mind those voice activated. I would have asked if Marta tried saying Benjamin's name when trying to open the diary previously...however, you answered my unspoken question.

The letter was amazing. I can't believe that this didn't actually happen. It was so well written I would swear that someone had actually wrote it to their daughter. Not to mention the background and history you put into it. I will forever be in awe of your writing skills. It isn't everyday someone comes across such a 'real-life' story.

It would be interesting to read a story about Benjamin and the original Marta back in the founding days. I am not much of a founders story reader, but I would be interested in one such as this because I have already become familiar with the characters.

I still believe poor Remus is going to have a complex about Marta. Even later in life, I can imagine him checking the air around him to make sure there is no Benjamin around (regardless if Benjamin was still 'surviving' or not) when he came close to Marta.

I also remembered you mentioning Marta's grandmother, Diana's mother because I have a friend by the name of Rhea. It isn't a common name and it does stick with a person once they come across it.

Thank you again for all of your hard work. You will forever be one of my writing inspirations. A level of excellence from which I wish to strive.


Author's Response: At this point, this story has been completed for about a month, I'm sorry to say. But at least you have everything out for your reading pleasure!

When I wrote Diana's diary introduction/letter, I worried for a bit that I was putting too much explanation in one place even though it made the most sense. I had been sitting on all that information for so long, it was actually a relief to get my notes put into a chapter with the ability to be read by others. In a weird sense, Diana was actually me reaching out to the Marta I had created (which could be considered a mother writing to her daughter).

Original Marta and Benjamin in Founders era. That's an idea I have definitely run through my head several times. I have a sequel to this story coming out soon, and this very idea will play a part in there somewhere (although I hope I won't regret giving out this spoiler later!).

I do feel sorry for Remus in this story (and any other story I put him in). I love him so much and yet put him in such horrible situations.

You know someone named Rhea? I think it's a lovely name and I love the mythological meaning behind it and all other names of the like.

Wow, thank you so much for leaving another excellent review! I hope you continue to enjoy my work, and I'm honored that you think of me as a writing inspiration!

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