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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Maggie here from the forums with your requested review :)

I see that you've gotten a lot of comments to this effect, but I have to just say that I love the way you start this chapter off. The details are great, and starting off with the mundane aspects of Ron's morning are a good way to ease us into things. I mean, sometimes I enjoy being plunged headlong into the action, but I found your calm, unhurried beginning to be a nice change from that :)

I also love the way you voice Ron's thoughts about Hermione. We all know that he isn't really the sappy romantic type, and I think you do a really good job of reflecting that. You show us how his feelings for Hermione have developed, and what his memories of her mean to him, but you don't go over the top with emotion. You really do a great job making his thoughts realistic (but still precious ;)

I saw a few minor grammar issues (mostly leaving out commas where they need to be placed), but nothing terribly distracting. Still, I'd suggest looking into a beta reader. We've got some great ones on the forums, and I think that could really help this story become the best it can be.

The little glimpse we get of Molly is spot on, I think, and I like the way you write Ron and Hermione's interaction. He's obnoxious, she's just classic Romione, and I think you execute it really well

Great job so far! Feel free to re-request; I'm excited to see where this one goes :)


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the R&R.
Every time someone says they liked my characterization of Ron I do this little happy dance inside, because out of all the characters I probably write him the least.. so that's always a nice little boost ;)
And as far as Molly... I just adore her.. how can you not? LOL. But again, she's another one I rarely write so thank you so much!
I'll definitely be back to request the next chapter!
Can't wait to see what you think!

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