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Review:caoty says:
I'm sorry if you wanted me to review something more recent, but I wanted to see how James was doing, so here I am, and I really can't believe this is the first review.
(That's a hell of a run-on sentence, ain't it?)

Anyway. Weasleys. Right. I like how you've characterised the Weasley-Potter clan as a whole as being both tight-knit and fiercely argumentative within themselves. It's lovely, but a bit claustrophobic, and gives us another reason to understand why James moved out like he did. Even if that particular decision is more to do with his parents and brother.

I'm not sure what to make of your decision to refer to Harry as, well, 'Harry', despite the perspective being reader-as-James. Could you explain that to me, please? I felt that it broke the characterisation a bit, but maybe I just don't get it.

The way James talks about Lily and George - you are fantastic at characterisation, you know that? With those kinds of descriptions and anecdotes, and of course the ones here in the narrative present, you've not created characters. You've created real, living, breathing people. You are essentially God. And I'm an atheist, too.

And our international man (model!) of mystery. You tease. I want to know more about this sexy, rich, culturally unaware man, though less for his sake and more for James'. Because I, as the reader, am James, so I kind of get attached, if that makes any sense whatsoever.

Despite the lack of reviews, I'd be thrilled if you carried on with this, because three wonderful chapters in a row ain't bad. :)

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