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Review:MargaretLane says:
WHAT? It wouldn't be as big a crime to hex Albus because Harry is no longer a Ministry official? I mean, I can see that it wouldn't create as big a fuss, but he's still Harry Potter's son and anyway, hexing a child should be a big enough deal.

And that's actually a pretty good plan-abducting the Prime Minister's niece.

*laughs at the part about Umbridge looking like a mental patient*

I really wonder what Draco's plot is.

Wow, I'd forgotten how good a dueller Scorpius was. I should have known there was some reason why you'd made that so clear in this series, but I assumed it was just to give Albus a rival who could actually rival him, if you know what I mean.

You've one mistake. When they are are talking about why Scorpius helped Albus and his friends, you've said "not would his father want him to be involved," when I assume you mean "nor".

I like the fact that there are sort of three "sides" here. You have Harry and the protagonists, then Draco and Laurentis and then Jarrett, Quinton et al. And Draco and Laurentis were sort of on the same side as Jarrett et al at the beginning, because they wanted to break the prisoners out, but now they are sort of on the same side as Harry and Albus because they want them recaptured.

Draco should have known better than to get Felix involved though. He would hardly want his uncle and cousin recaptured.

Best of luck with Nano.

Author's Response: Hexing a child should be a big enough deal, and it is. But Willinson is twisted and he thinks that it won't be as big of a deal. He got captured anyway and didn't get his demands met, so he was proven wrong. It would've been a good plan, but no one was willing to go along with it.

Draco's plan was what Harry explained to Albus. The theory on how the prisoners were let loose and then recaptured at just the right time. Scorpius is quite a good dueler. He and Albus are definitely the best and next year they'll get to duel each other at tournaments.

Thanks for pointing out the typo! I really liked doing the three sides thing, too. I thought it gave a bit more depth. I'm glad you liked it! It's never good when Felix is involved. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)


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