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Review:MargaretLane says:
Interesting dream.

One mistake I noticed was that you've written "be careful while your living down there", when it should be "be careful while YOU'RE living down there." If you are shortening "you are", you need the apostrophe to stand in for the "a".

*laughs at Scorpius turning his needle into pink panties* That took...a certain amount of talent.

Ha, ha, typical Slughorn. Always out for an easy life and obsessed with people's families.

McGonagall doesn't have a space between the "c" and the "G"

Hmm, I've a feeling there's something more to Luke finding the potion so easy. Just because of the part where he wouldn't tell them anything more. I can't imagine what it could be, though.

Oh, yikes, Professor Yoki is a bit dodgy. I wonder what will happen once it's found out what she's teaching. I doubt it'll be long before it is.

You've left out a "h" when talking about why Albus didn't want to go to the Slug Club meeting. You said "according to is dad."

Author's Response: Wow I longie!
First off, thanks for the review!
I made a lot of mistakes one the begining chapters, because that was before I got a beta. and I really don't have time to edit them. I barely have time to write the chapters!

The needle into pink panties was halrious, I laughed so hard when I wrote that. Don't forget the purple bra!!

This is alot of hidden backround to Luke that should be revealed soon. around christmas in the book.

Professor Yoki is. evil? Freaky? read on and find out! I don't want to spoil it!

Keep Reading!


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