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Review:Jchrissy says:
I still can't believe I didn't submit the review on this when I read it the first time. But the good news is, this chapter was just as entertaining the second read through as the first!

Oh. My. God. I feel like I'm in my theater class. Practicing our improv with the Albus and Scorpius scene. Which is perfect. Because everyone knows in Drama you over act, and the fact that no one in the crowd is falling on the ground laughing as Al removes his glove, is just such an awesome credit to your ability write this time period. I could read that entire section over and over.

I am so jealous of you right now. The green envy kind where I almost want to just exit out of this box. But I won't, because.. I pretend to be a big person and all that. BUT! Your seamless transition from the more comic aspect of this t Rose's own thoughts about their society, which clearly hasn't risen from the ashes the way we imagine the world in HP day to have. I just. I want to use big letters at you or something because of that tactic that you've really mastered like no one else I've seen. This second part didn't feel slightly out of place, it felt necessary actually. You gave us this real substance, and it wasn't necessary to make this story awesome, but it absolutely got me more addicted to their world. And know Harry has done something naughty! He's given Rose a way to get past what her aunt said, well I guess he just gave her the name that would lead her to an answer, but still. I just really loved their conversation. It felt like Harry was really seeing that Rose truly is something *more*.

I feel like I never make sense in the reviews I leave you. That's your fault; you're the one who writes so well that I just get mushy.

I can't wait to find out what happens! In the meantime, I'll occupy myself with a step into Minerva's world ;)

Author's Response: Yay! It's a great relief to hear that this chapter was as good as the last. It's not just the fact that this chapter was... rather bipolar in nature, but also the amount of time that passes between updates poses a threat to my style. I always wonder whether I can keep up the right tone for this story, as it requires a very specific voice. It's a wonderful voice to use, but it doesn't always come naturally.

Haha, that scene between Albus and Scorpius! It's so wonderfully overdramatic - I had way too much fun writing it, making the seconds tick past as Albus pulled each finger from his glove. These two and Lily are very theatrical, and Rose just watches them and shakes her head in wonder. But from what I've read of this period, this flair for the dramatic was the fashion in courtly circles. It doesn't come into Austen's work to any great degree, but when I read about the Prince Regent or Beau Brummel, I was amazed. That's probably why the crowd doesn't laugh - they see it all as part of the show, and only Rose sees it as alien. Ginny tells her to ignore it and let them perform the duel, but Rose can't because it's just so strange to her - she feels the slight as a real insult, and she wants real revenge. What Albus wants out of it is more ambiguous.

Jealous of me?! :O I can't tell you how happy I am to hear that the transition was seamless! It didn't feel that way to me, but as long as it looks that way, I'll feel better about it. It seemed like such a contrast between the bright stage of the ball and the darkened salons where Rose indulges in her equally dark thoughts. She doesn't belong in that other world - if anything, she's more like the older generation, and Harry not only recognizes that, he respects her for it. Now that I think of it, the second half of the story represents the reality of their world, whereas the first scene is this artificial world that Rose will always oppose. Perhaps she'll even try to pull it down to expose its shallowness. But that might end up being too deep for what I initially meant to be a fun, light story. :P

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing these last few chapters! It means a lot to hear your opinions - you're an amazing reader and reviewer! ^_^

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