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Review:Sundowner says:
Hello, again!

First; is Zoe a Hufflepuff or a Ravenclaw? Because I'm pretty sure in the summary it says she is a Ravenclaw. You might want to change that. :))

Also, this sentence: “I think it wants us to leave?”I said skeptically, not really understanding why the rat was attacked Evelyn’s leg.

Shouldn't it be better: "not really understanding why the rat had attacked Evelyn's leg." - My English is not the best but this sounds better to me.

On a more cheerful note, I like that you showed us her friends and her relationship with them. I like Evelyn, she sounds like someone I would get along with great. My request is that you make your chapters a bit longer but that's entirely up to you. I like where this is going, and I will return to read the next chapter when you post it.

Peace ;)

Author's Response: Hello!
Zoe is infact a Ravenclaw, that is my bad :3 Little mistakes like these are slipping from me, i'll have to look a little bit more carefully while re-reading my work. Same goes to the sentence, yours does sound more correct then mine. I typed it wrong, instead of attacked it was supposed to be attacking - not pretence.

I'm glad you are liking it and I will of course be making my chapters longer in the near future! This week was crazy for my writing schedule since it was spirit week but I have the weekend to type something nice up and hopefull you'll enjoy it when I get around to posting it! Thanks for the review


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