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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello! Thought I'd drop by and read some of your work and return your reviews :)

I think this is an intriguing start to something longer! I love the shifting viewpoints of the story (from Roland to Clio to Remus). I think this was handled quite well.

The setting of Spinner's End is very meticulously built up through the detailed descriptions, and your prose is very nicely textured with all sorts of sights, smells, sounds. The sense of the grimy urban atmosphere is very well developed.

I especially like the final part describing Remus and his scavenging for food. Wonderful imagery, lovely detail.

There were a few grammatical errors here and there but nothing too disruptive or glaring.

Overall, great work! Hope you update this soon. I'm intrigued to see how this story goes!

-teh

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for stopping by! :)

I'm glad you like the shifting viewpoints, because they're going to continue. :) Roland won't be back for a long time, but I was intrigued by the idea of Snape having neighbors who wonder who/what he is, and so he will pop up again.

I'm even more intrigued with what Remus does to survive ... I figured he must be extremely resourceful and thought that it made sense for him to have a highly developed sense of smell (no wolfy superpowers, though).

I think I could edit everything I write a dozen times and still miss some of the grammar errors. :)

I've just added the next chapter to the validation queue. I hope you'll continue to read and enjoy it!


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