My, my. Shall I just say, an excellent start?
I have just recently, after reading your reviews on mystory, started reading Along Came Lucy...and it is a wonderful story, as is this. I just love the direct way you start it, its so straightforward and blunt, you feel as if you've plunged right into the plot. The character of Ophelia is an, interesting one, and I daresay we'll see more of her. Antonin seems nice enough, but you can never say. And as for Norah, she seems to be a great character, really complex, but when we get into her world, everything's crystal clear, and the way she describes stuff, you feel you're watching a movie.
You r style of writing is unique, one that i've tried, without success, to emulate. It's a leisurely pace, but still keeps our curiosity up. Well done!
Now i'm off to read the next chapter.
Lots of love,
P.S. Her age and ownership of the team is not an issue at all. If anything, it increases the fun factor in the story. All I wish to know is, how did the Appleby Arrows, second in the league according to Quidditch Through The Ages, get worse than Cannons. Perhaps the next chapter holds answers... :)
Author's Response: Aww, thanks (:.
-ducks head- ACL was my first attempt at writing an actual story, and I cringe sometimes when I read some of the chapters. It was way rushed. But, I leave it up because it was my first story, and I'm eternally grateful to everyone who read, reviewed, and added it to their favorites. That, and it's a nice look back at how different my writing is from back then.
When it comes to my stories, I prefer starting right in the thick of things, then revealing bits and pieces as we go along. It's the only way that works for me, even though I've tried other methods.
Eheh. Ophelia is... yes, interesting is a good word for her. And you're right in thinking that we'll see more of her. Being handed her just desserts by someone from beyond the grave is not something she'll take lightly. Best believe she'll try some way to ruin things.
Antonin is nice, but sometimes the nice ones are the on you have to look out for, right? But who knows. Maybe he's the realest person in the entire story. You never know.
I'm so glad that it kept your attention and piqued your curiosity! The last thing I'd want to do is bore the reader. I hope you'll still be curious as the story continues!
That's what I thought too. Her age gives plenty of obstacles for her to encounter and attempt to overcome. I'm not too bold to think that she can overcome them all, but she'll give a fighting effort. As for the Arrows. I'll admit that I've taken many liberties with this story. I had a bit of a mental debate when it came to selecting a team before settling on them. I have no idea what Quidditch Through The Ages has to say on the matter, but I'm probably bending most of it. The lexicon didn't have much to offer on the teams, so I thought it would be okay.
As for their now terrible record. Her Dad had much to do with that. He pretty much ran the team into the ground with his poor decision-making. He may be a brilliant businessman, but he was a terrible owner. Didn't give the team the attention it deserved.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!