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Review:True Author says:
Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]

I'm really sorry for missing your request dear! Thanks for reminding me, or I would have been very ashamed of myself later...

Anyways, I read your story and actually liked it. =] you have a powerful plot with lots of characters to explore. Your characterization sounds good in this one, but please always be careful about your characters because your story is actually based on them. Hestia, Felix, and main of all Evie was good.

Your flow could do some work. Your story sounds stiff at some places like the opening paragraph. I really think you should begin your story with something attractive rather than- "Sometimes Iím struck by a monsterous lucidity." I'll suggest you to search and find lyrics to fit the plot or you can use quotes or a thought something like that. An attractive beginning always improves your story. =]

Anyways, it was a nice start. sorry for missing the review again... =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming! No problem on the skipping over, I'm so glad I did the awkward ask after it and you came! =]

I'm so glad you like my little collection of chums, I'll do my best to be fair and careful with all of them-it's their flaws and strengths I depend on for the plot ahead. It's always a relief to know that Evie has passed her initial test though, she's what keeps it all together.

As for the rest, I thank you for the criticism and the idea-I'll consider looking for some lyrics, but it isn't something I've ever done as it seems a strange distraction sometimes. The opening paragraph(s) are how this story came about, and for me it fits-I'm sorry for you it didn't. But despite the fact it's a bit sudden and lumpy perhaps, it was a carefully written beginning. Evie herself says it's a rotten way to begin, but the story is about rotten things, and hitting the ground running and not knowing where to stop. I'm rambling, aha, sorry.

Thank you so much for taking the time, and I'm sorry I took a while to respond!

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