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Review:CambAngst says:
Augh! You've probably been wondering what happened to me. I've been throwing myself into writing challenge entries lately, but I have not forgotten about my dear Pansy! Let's see what she's gotten herself into now...

I'm always amazed at how much thought Pansy puts into everything. The lengths she goes to in order to manage the impressions she's creating in the world are extraordinary, and I like the way you explain them and put her unique twist on all of the rationales. The ways that she's able to stretch her Sickles while trying not to appear cheap are well thought out. You don't miss anything!

This line really jumped out at me: "now that she was more familiar with how friendships were formed she knew that they took a long time to reach the level of strength she was looking for." It's easy to forget what a struggle life is for her until a reminder like this comes along. She really has had to learn a lot of things from the ground up. It's like starting over from zero.

The scene with her mother is really sad. They're both so dysfunctional when it comes to trying to express their feelings toward one another. Each one is a victim of the changes that came after the war, but they've handled it in completely different ways. It's heart-breaking to think that her mother has made it, I would guess, into her late forties and still lacks the emotional vocabulary to tell her own daughter how much she misses her. For her part, Pansy just seems rather empty. The metaphor that you use for Pansy's certainty about her parents' love is so appropriate. She took their love for granted without even understanding what love really means.

And her day doesn't get any better. I'm reading between the lines, but I assume that Cyril bumped into her deliberately. Or perhaps it wasn't deliberate, but he obviously made a huge scene of it regardless of whose fault it really was. All along, I've expected Pansy to have to deal with something like this, but somehow that didn't soften the impact of this section. It was nice to see that her friendly overtures toward her coworkers paid off. The conflict inside of her between her father's voice and her own realizations was a beautiful touch. There's hope for her yet.

A few times over the course of this story -- and when did you make it to chapter 23, by the way? It does not feel like I've been reading this for that long! -- I've suggested that things felt a bit slow. As though a lot of narrative passes in between "big" events. In the quietest sort of way, I thought this chapter was a "big" event. It's so much more significant that anyone would guess if they hadn't been following Pansy's struggles from the beginning. It was very nicely done and I enjoyed it thoroughly!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Don't worry about the time- I very much enjoyed the entry you wrote for me!

I'm glad that you like the way I'm writing Pansy's view on the world. Occasionally I worry that I'm writing her as too "intelligent" for the way she was portrayed in the books but it makes sense to me the way that I'm writing her. For me, the way in which she views the world is the way in which she was brought up to see it, the only way in which she can see it. Anyway, tangent aside, I'm glad that you liked it!

Writing scenes between Pansy and her mother is very interesting because it's full of painful moments where neither of them know quite what to do or say. Neither of them was brought up in a very loving atmosphere and they never quite learned how to express their emotions because they were always taught to hide them. It's led to, as you said, an interesting situation where both of them know that they love each other but they can't express it.

No, her day most certainly does not get any better. You're correct that Cyril bumped into her deliberately, though there's more to the scene than that, as you'll see in the next chapter. I'm glad that you liked the scene!

Haha- I know, the story has come really far- it's at chapter 24 now, and I'll hopefully post chapter 25 within the next week or so. (It doesn't seem like I've been writing it that long, either). I'm so so so happy that you enjoyed the "big" moment in this chapter and thought that it was well done.

Thank you once again for taking the time to read and review! I really enjoyed reading your comments on this chapter!


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