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Review:javct says:
javct45 here (finally!) with your requested review.

Sorry for taking so long; school is being annoying again.

Now, onto the story: you have set up the characters really well, you've given them strong foundations and good personalities. I like how Max (or Maggie - I ADORE that name by the way) is a metamorphmagus (let's pretend that I didn't copy and paste that because I cant' spell it) it adds another dimension to her and also how it portrays her moods -- that should be interesting to see how it plays out in the story.

Also, what's this? A fic about two-girls that ISN'T slash? Gosh, I love you. I'm really sick of girls not being able to friends or enemies without something either 'romantic' or 'physical' happening between them!

You asked about grammar. I did pick up one thing that happened quite a few times. After someone has finished speaking you have to put either a comma, a full stop or an exposition (!?), I noticed that you did it a few times but you also missed it. Nothing a quick once over won't fix.

Great job!
Jasmine, x

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review this!! I know all about school being annoying, I have exams I should be studying for.

Haha I get annoyed by that too. And guy-girl relationships that can't be just friends. One of the things I really wanted to explore in this was the idea of a friendship between two opposing personalities and the dynamics around that. I doubt there is going to be anything more than hand holding in the way of romance in this :P

Thanks for the grammar tip!! I never paid enough attention in English, and most of my troubles do tend to be centred around speech. I will definitely go through and fix this up.

Thanks again for your review!! You put a huge smile on my face :D


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