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Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]

I must say you have a really interesting plot. The first chapter is breathtaking from the very first paragraph; I mean I was so shocked when you mentioned "red snow". I thought it was a mistake, but then I realised what it was, so just forget this. ;) it's just my silly mistake. The point is, this causes a sudden effect on the reader.

The way you have created the background of your story, without even describing Sirius is brilliant. The mysterious night, the fear rising in Sirius's mind, the scenery, the blood trail everything is just perfect. I must say you're a great describer. ;)

Still, Annabel needs some work. If Sirius says, "I couldn't hurt anyone as pretty as you,", when he never paid much attention to girls according to JKR; you must just describe how did she look when Sirius saw her. You're writing from his PoV, and I think he must've told how pretty she looked. Don't you think so?

Otherwise, you have a good plot and writing style, so go ahead! =]

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

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