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Review:caoty says:
I can't articulate how much I've fallen in love with this.

I love your Fleur. I love your Fleur. I told you that when I first met her, but I just had to remind you. She's flawed and vengeful and yet we still like her anyway because she will do anything for her family, even her in-laws.

I like the second person thing; it gives the narrative a sort of detachment-yet-immediacy that it wouldn't have had if it were written in any other kind of style. A lot of the time, second person can just feel sort of gimmicky, or just a replacement of first or third, but it works here.

Also, Greyback. Love him. Love to hate him. He is fantastic and believable here and we can't fault Fleur for wanting him to suffer because he is clearly never going to change.

Gushing aside - you've got a few typos still and a couple of sentences that don't make sense, like:

>Your hand slips into your pocket using the grace that youíve been trained.

I mean I get what you're trying to say and all, it just was worded a bit confusingly.

Anyway. This is probably my favourite of yours so far. Well done, my darling.

Author's Response: I am so happy you liked this ♥! Fleur is really one of my favorite people to write. I tried about a million times to write this first person and third person, but second just worked. I think because it lets you use more of a poetic sense, and it was like I was watching a horror movie. Haha.

Thank you so much for the review my darling ♥


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