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Review:kalkay says:
What a wonderful story that really seemed to fit the idea that I had in mind. I love what you were able to do with these characters and how you made it work out.

There were a few typos that I noticed, particularly in the last two paragraphs of Rose's POV. Nothing major, but I believe there was one spot where you said could instead of couldn't which clearly chagnes the whole story. Minor edits though, and nothing to complicated.

I don't normally like next gen in all honesty but I thought that this one was fitting. I could just picture them, young adults, newly married and both of them worried and scared out of their mind for the life that they had planed, because they know that they will have to change their plan from the original one. I really like that you made them young adults though, I feel it was much more fitting for that age bracket to deal with than say, someone younger and if you had gone with someone older, I don't feel like it wouldn't have the same amount of pressing concern/impact on their lives. I feel comfortable in saying that this is my favorite next gen story I think I've read to date.

Again wonderful story! Thank you so much for the entry!

Author's Response: Kalkay,

Wow, this is such a wonderful review to read. I'm so happy I was able to write a story that fit the challenge you had laid out. It was a great challenge and interesting to take an abstract view such as it's broke and turn it into a story.

I will have to go back a re-read the story and fix the typos. Sometimes my fingers get away from me.

I'm not a big Next-Gen reader or writer. I'm surprised I could write this couple at all because it isn't my comfort zone at all. I had the same feeling about their ages. There is really no better age bracket to write this type of story with these problems and leading to this ending.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review and I'm glad you found this story enjoyable.


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