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Review:caoty says:
Hey, I'm here with your requested review.

If what you were wondering was obvious was if I'm right and Drasina is Hermione, then yeah, I'm not going to lie to you, it is fairly easy to work out. That said, that's not necessarily a bad thing; I'm more interested in how she ended up here, and why nobody is able to find her, which are more interesting questions than that of her identity anyway. (Another question I have is why she's given herself - or at least, that's what I assume - such a weird name. :P)
The way you've managed to create mystery through an ordinary day is pretty cool, too.

So anyway. I've got a fair bit of critique for this because it could turn out to be really amazing with some fixing up:
a) The logic of moving to a Wizarding community to get away from Wizarding media. Okay, so maybe Pyre Hill is small, but it has lots of people who know Narcissa and Draco in it, and it's right next to London where the Daily Prophet isbased. I don't really understand - could you explain that to me, please?

b) Yeah, there were quite a few typos in this - may I suggest you get someone to beta read for you? It'd make this easier to read in the future.

Anyway, good luck with writing! :)

Author's Response: The next chapter will explain some more as to the questions why no one could find her and how she got that particular name. Answer to A: there wasn't a lot of logic behind that( oops) but I didn't want them based out of Malfoy manor. So I'm going to go with, its their less obvious summer home. B: I am trying to find a beta to help me with that. :) Thank you for reviewing :)

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