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Review:RosieQueen says:
It's Rosie from the review tag! :)

Wow, this was an excellent one-shot! I loved how you managed to put humor and horror/dark together. That must have been very difficult, considering that those genres almost never go together. But somehow you pulled it off very nicely. :)

As someone who is very into the era of the Second Wizarding war, (I have two stories about it!) I think you did a very good job characterizing Amycus and showing the current climate the students are in. Amycus and the Slyherins were perfectly harsh and realistic, so that's wonderful. :)

One critique I have is about Amycus knowing about Dumbledore's army. Wouldn't they have already been severely punished or expelled if the Carrows knew about it? Because in the seventh book it said that the Carrows had brought back many of Umbridge's rules, and one of them being about expelling students on starting illegal organizations. Not a very big deal, honest! It doesn't take anything away from the story.

Overall, this was a very enjoyable one-shot. I loved the ending where Neville goes to the Room of Requirement, because we know that at one point something causes him to start living there, so your interpretation was interesting. The flow and grammar was excellent. Keep up the great work! :)

~Rosie

Author's Response: Heya Rosie!

I wasn't actually going to put horror/dark in this, but as I was writing it I didn't know if I should put it in or not, (Obviously I put it in, just to be safe) but quite a few people have said that I pulled it off, so that's always good to hear. :)

I'm glad to hear Amycus' characterisation was well done! I was rather worried about that. :p

I completely forgot about that! But, I kinda needed that to get the thing flowing. :/ If I ever think of another way to write it, I'll put it in there and credit you for pointing that out!

I'm glad you liked it! I don't think we were ever told how Neville got to the Room of Requirement, I thought I'd put that in. ;)

Thanks for reviewing! :D


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