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Review:caoty says:
Hello, it's me with your requested review. :)

This is gorgeously written; your imagery isn't too much, but your descriptions are wonderful and unique, and I know that sounds like so many empty words but it's true.

You've also captured the emotions associated with being a children's Healer extremely well - hope and sadness alike - and so well done for that, you've handled something hard-hitting with elegance.

There is a fair bit of similarity between your two characters, but it's not terrible or anything, and you obviously have the chance to flesh them out a bit more as you go.

I've got a nitpick for you - you've got sentences like these:

>She was a delicate little girl who was fragile in every sense of the word >but who showcased unparalleled thrill to leave the ward and go to >Hogwarts so she can learn things and hear stories and grow to find a >cure for her condition.

and that's a really, really long time to go without a comma. The narrator-voice in my head ran out of breath!

Anyway, apart from that, you've done well so far and I'm glad I've read this. Good luck writing! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this review and I'm sorry I have taken some time to respond.

I really did want to focus on the fact that even in the Wizarding World, people don't just 'magically' recover. So I'm glad that theme showed.

And nit-pick all you want! I will be sure to go back and see if I can put some things apart.

Thank you so much for the encouraging and helpful review. I cannot thank you enough for your kind compliments. -hugs-

-Manno



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