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Review:caoty says:
Hey there, I'm here with your requested review. :)

First off, I really like your descriptions. You've done well with the dark settings of the cold snow in the forest - so well in fact, that I'm starting to feel a bit chilly in my well-heated room. Seriously. Your descriptions are short but effective. Well done. You're definitely not out of shape in your writing skills.

Plus, it helps to create a lot of mystery surrounding your characters; how did they get here? Poor Annabel. That can't have been a fun night.

The only thing that I'm not too sure about is your characterisation of Sirius. He seems a lot more quiet and introspective here than he appears in canon (and in fanon, for that matter). In fact, if I were to attempt to guess who the narrator is, I'd probably guess Remus.
That said, I'm willing to chalk it up to the fact that it's the middle of the night and he's far too tired to be the crazed ball of energy that is Sirius Black. :P

You've also got a few misplaced apostrophes and full stops, so you may want to double-check that or get it beta read.

Anyway, this is a good start, and I hope this goes well for you. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

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