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Review:academica says:
Hello Dan! I'm here with another requested review!

The beginning of this was scary! Is it bad that I'm pretty mad at Fiona for taking her time getting ready? I get that she has a point about transporting a small child, but still--poor Hugo, having to leave Rose hanging out to dry. Hopefully we'll get to check in with her in the next chapter.

I liked Harry and Ron's great escape with Susan. It's nice to see that there are still lots of people coming out of the woodwork to help them. Harry's influence must have lasted long after Voldemort's defeat, and it warms my heart to see that he's not quite as alone as he sometimes feels. I loved Charlene's little diversion with the "code," though I wasn't as big a fan of her dialogue up to that point. I felt like she talked a little too long and her comments interrupted the flow for me a little bit. I kept wondering why the guards hadn't looked over and noticed Harry and Ron as she kept talking.

Now, to the point--the car chase. I really liked it, and I definitely felt that sense of danger every time Harry and Ron had to quickly Confundo someone else. I liked the ending, too, where the others were trying to convince Harry to once again take a lead role. The poor guy really can't catch a break, can he? Also, Susan--just love her. It's great how she can still crack a joke even while in recovery, and hopefully she enjoys having a bit of time off.

Nice work! I hope this is helpful! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello, again!

Even knowing how the story ends, I feel badly for Hugo in this situation. He's having a hard time convincing his wife of how much danger they're really in because the whole thing still seems like a bad dream to him. Unfortunately, it's about to get very, very real...

Charlene was definitely a bit annoying with the benefit of hindsight. Her dialog probably is a bit overdone. But your point is correct: all over the wizarding world there are people who believe in what Harry represents and they want to see him as the hero who's going to set things right in the Ministry. The last person to see it, of course, is Harry.

The care chase was an idea that was part of the plot outline from the very earliest drafts, so I'm glad you liked it. It was a lot of fun to write. And Susan does do a really elegant job of making her point, doesn't she? Will Harry finally come around? We shall see...

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Your insights are always helpful.


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