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Review:academica says:
Here from Review Tag! :)

This was really entertaining, and I think a lot of it was your Audrey's relatability. I think this Audrey is a good match for Percy, in that they're both trying to be practical and yet come across as a bit awkward. I love how she feels uncomfortable regarding her figure, and yet her attitude toward Rita is the picture of pristine, polite femininity. Perhaps she fits in with Fleur and Ginny after all.

The flow of this was lovely. For a moment there, I thought Rita was the one sobbing into her phone and felt a sick sense of satisfaction. However, I think the atmosphere you created so perfectly in the beginning provides a beautifully unfitting backdrop to Rita's very serious interview with Audrey. Nice job setting the scene and tone.

Nice work, once again!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Oh my God, it's you! :)

I was trying to write not just an introspective female character, but one whose personality is both individual and meshes well enough with Percy's so that it's believable that they'd actually get married. I've never done that before, so I'm really glad you think it works.
And as for femininity, polite or otherwise: this is (as well as the cafes and the caligynephobia) a story about women, or at least, that was the intention - so, yeah, again, thank you for mentioning that. ^.^

It'd have been great if Rita was the sad drunk, but alas, it wouldn't have fit into the story. :(
But the description and the mood setting - this is a bit of mood music really, rather than a story - was so, so much fun to do, so I spent like 600 words doing it...

Thank you so much for your lovely, lovely review. :)


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