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Review:MargaretLane says:
Thanks for entering my challenge.

Before I start reading, I'll say that this sounds like a really original idea for a story.

Hmm, I think Draco is rather missing the point. The issue isn't really that his words hurt Hermione. I very much doubt she cares WHAT he thinks of her. The issue is that his views were extremely bigoted and that he joined what was basically a terrorist hate-group. Admittedly, he was somewhat forced into it, but the fact that he can't fully admit what he's done in the letter or apologise properly wouldn't impress me if I was Hermione. Boiling discrimination and hate-crimes down to "oh, I didn't really mean what I said" is minimising and making excuses.

Hmm, I wonder what the disastrous consequences of his words refers to. I'm pretty sure he is dealing with disastrous consequences, but they would be consequences of him joining the Death Eaters rather than just of his words.

Unless he feels that losing a chance to be friends with or go out with Hermione is the worst thing that ever happened to him, in which case, I think he is once more missing the point. *laughs* For one thing, even if he was nice to her, the odds are against her falling in love with him. Presumably most people are reasonably nice to her. She's not going to fall in love with them all.

Unless there's something you haven't revealed yet and she and he were developing a friendship that he wrecked in some way.

Or of course, the consequences may not refer to her at all.

Intriguing letter.

You've a small "he" on "He nodded" when it should be a capital. It'd also probably be better to put it on the next line, so as to separate it from what Rose said.

Love the part where he tells her to go and play and she gets insulted because she's not five. It's pretty typical of being 11 or 12, when you feel you are so grown up and that PLAYING is beneath you, no matter how much you want to.

The attitudes of Ron and Hermione seem quite characteristic. I can easily see Ron never forgiving Draco, whereas I think it is quite likely that Hermione, who tends to be sympathetic to underdogs would figure he was very young, he had been pretty brainwashed by his family and so on and he learnt a pretty harsh lesson or two, and he is likely a better person now.

I think Hermione is being a bit unfair now, saying that Ron is just holding a grudge. Draco did some appalling things. I think Ron has good reasons not to be willing to trust him. But it makes sense, because Hermione always did think she was right.

It will be interesting to see if Draco really has changed his ways and to what degree.

Author's Response: Hey, Sorry this is late.
Yeah, Draco is very much missing the point and I also doubt Hermione would fall in love with him as well! (Romione for ever :P )
Thanks for the CC, I'll go back and edit when I get a chance.
I'm glad you though the characterization was good and thanks for the review! :D


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