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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi, I'm here for your requested review! I'm so sorry it's taken so long for me to get here! It's been utter madness here so getting back involved with the site has been hard! But i'm here now!

So, you asked about flow. I think you're flow here is fine by my eyes. It's actually quite lovely and almost poetical in a sense. Which is nice and makes it easy to follow and I think it adds to the overall meaning to the story. It's always great to see the style of writing also reflect the emotion of the piece.

Saying that, however, i felt like although this was a really nice piece writing wise i felt like it could have said the same thing with less words. It felt like it dragged a little, not because it wasn't enjoyable to read, but because it focussed so completely on her suffering and angst that i felt like i got the picture of that emotion quite quickly. It almost seemed like she was suffering for the sake of it to an extent. What might help this if there is some more background story because it made it hard for me to really connect with her because I didn't know who the narrator was and who the sister was. (was she a witch, why did the narrator hate her for so long? Was it because her sister could actually do magic?) Things like that made me feel a little disconnected from the story as there really wasn't many answers to those and also it would make the story feel fuller and more round if there was something other than just her regret and guilt. This may be because i'm not partial to second person but i also felt like maybe you should make it clearer that it's Mrs. Figg earlier because i spent a good chunk of the beginning just being annoyed that i kept being referred to in the story.

I do think you were able to describe the emotion well though and i do applaud that you could do it with this narrative. I do think it's well done and the writing itself is lovely. I don't think you really contradict yourself here at all from what i could tell. I think it was well done in that the thoughts and emotions did seem to come naturally.

There was some awkwardness in some of your sentences, nothing serious but here is an example:

You've seen her tear apart and you could never be the reason for her to go through it again.

You've seen her being torn apart... or something because i think there needs to be reworded because at the moment it sort of sounds like the mother is tearing apart something rather than the mum is being torn apart by the loss of the other sister.

This was interesting however because you never see a story featuring Figg so it was awesome to see a glimpse into her life before we know her. To see her torment and it actually makes me so curious to see how she comes out of this in the end to become who we know her as.

Anyway, sorry for the delay in the review but i hope that this was helpful to you and thank you so much for requesting, i did enjoy this.

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