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Review:seekers_destiny says:
I know that they say maths instead of math in the UK, do they also say logics instead of logic? I would have put that in errata but I wasn't sure. I was surprised that Bellatrix would refer to Snape as 'Daddy'. Maybe it's her weird way of mocking both of them at the same time. The DEs are as nasty to each other as they are to their targets. They deserve each other.

I find it strange that Izzy would want Ginny to have the papyrus or that Ginny wouldn't want Izzy to have it. It was much more important to Izzy. It may drive some drama now but it doesn't make sense to me.

The more important part is what I liked and there was a lot to like. I liked the Mia/Izzy conversation but the part once Remus arrived was also very good. The best of the best was probably the discussion about drinking at the end.

errata:
had a feeling there was no potion lack of pepper-up potion
had a feeling there was no lack of pepper-up potion

I guess you managed to over overthrow them.
I guess you managed to overcome them.

There werenít sighs of head trauma
There werenít signs of head trauma

In once pushed my friends to pick a secret-keeper
I once pushed my friends to pick a secret-keeper

try to chase yon
try to chase you

nodding at a plane with two or three more
nodding at a plate with two or three more

not just in theses first few years
not just in these first few years

Mia and Remus flowing shortly
Mia and Remus following shortly

Author's Response: I'm pretty sure they say logics but I'll have to confirm with my Dad. I've lived most of my life in Portugal, so although english is widely spoken in my house, sometimes little things can slip.
Bellatrix was defenitely mocking those two - she's basically calling them children who need their most-hated colleague to serve as their 'parent'.
It's not that either Izzy or Ginny would want or not want the other to have a papyrus. Still, since Izzy was always technically borrowing it from Ginny (who also used it to send messages to her family) and part of a set whose other part belonged to her brothers, Izzy had always kept it in Ginny's trunk because, well, it's the polite thing to do when you borrow stuff from other people. Period. Like Izzy pointed out, they didn't prepare for the possibility of being separated and not seeing each other again before going into hiding, so, with everything going on, it didn't even slip their minds to let Izzy have the papyrus with her until it was too late. It was basically a mistake, not an intention: there is no doubt in my mind that, if they'd had a little more time and the chance to discuss it, Ginny wouls have made Izzy take without argument. I thought I'd made it clear in the dialogue, but I guess it wasn't.
Glad you liked that last part - it was fun to write. The drinking part especially.
Anne


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