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Review:TenthWeasley says:
MOLLY WHAAAT.

I have gone into shock. I just... I have lost the ability to can. I am going to just babble on incoherently for a bit and call it a review, deal? Deal.

For the first part of this chapter, I didn't expect anything to go amiss. I do feel really sorry for Lysander, though -- no, scratch that. I feel very sorry for Dominique, because she is fooling herself into thinking she doesn't love Lysander. I am convinced she does; perhaps she feels she is no longer worthy of love? But I seriously don't see how she's able to reject a shirtless Irishman. I ship them with ridiculous amounts of severity. My poor heart, being twisted around like this (ugh, just thought of Jane's body).

And then that newspaper article! Oh, if only Dom had found that sooner... and now I'm being plagued with a whole slew of "what if" scenarios. Poor, poor girl. I feel like I'm going to retreat back to that point in the story and scream at her to pick up the newspaper, and then maybe everything will be all right.

BUT SERIOUSLY, WHERE DID MOLLY COME FROM. And surely Lysander doesn't know about it?! Is she -- OH, HOLD UP. MOLLY BETTER STEP OFF LYSANDER. Is she getting close to him to try and kill him? Did she kill Jane? Why is Jane dead, anyway -- did she just find out too much?

I am dead. Deader than dead. I have so many questions and no answers and I just want to know things. Fantastic chapter, Hattie, and congratulations on finishing this story!! ♥ So proud of you!

Author's Response: I KNOW, RIGHT?

AND YES, JANECHEL IS IN SHOCK. Ehehehe, that was my plan all along... and who doesn't love incoherent babbling? ♥

But does she though? Does she really love Lysander? Yes, you're right, she probably does on some deep, deep level - a close friendship always brings strong feelings of affection - but she doesn't know that she does. She doesn't thinks she does, hence the exit. But obviously she told him that she loved him and it's all awkward now. Meh.

I thought that was the worst part of the chapter - it was so rushed, so randomly there that it made it seem like I needed an easy way out. I did plan that bit in way back at the beginning, but the way I wrote it just made it seem weird. I think I'll go back and edit when the story is all finished.

MOLLY, I KNOW. YOU'LL FIND OUT PRETTY MUCH EVERYTHING (but not really) SOON. AND SHE'S MENTAL AND TWISTS EVERYONE AND THEN SETS OFF A NUCLEAR BOMB THAT KILLS OFF ALL THE PEOPLE.

YOU'RE AS DEAD AS THEM.

Thanks for the review, though. :) ♥


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