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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hello, I'm here with your requested review and I'm sorry it has taken me a while to get here!

First of all, when you told me in your request that it's a Molly/Arthur story, I got really, really excited because I don't think I've ever read one before. And I am very happy this is my first because it's not quite your usual narrative. It's the kind of story with flowery language, stylistic techniques, and a gentle pace, making everything dreamy and pretty and interesting!

I think that the opening was just perfect. As children, all we really do is watch the people around us and want to emulate them, to grow up to be like them one day, even if we really haven't proper reasons, even if it's just about the dresses and the shoes and the music. I also like the concept of the shoes itself, how a pair can make you a better dancer, that it can bring you magic. I just love the way you described those things and was smiling at how simple and, at the same time, effective the tone and style throughout the story was.

I also really liked the bit where you mentioned how Molly was practicing her dance moves in front of the mirror and how her dormmates were reacting to that.

I didn't feel that there's any problem with the structure. The change in character was very obvious, yet, somehow, you managed to keep the same dreamy tone and make it work for the newly introduced character just as well as it did for Molly. And I think it's really nice that you showed us the bar part from Arthur's point of view; the way you made him think made things very interesting.

Now, onto characterisation! I really like the way you wrote the characters in here. You wrote young Molly as a child quite perfectly, you made her TRULY a kid. And the way you described Arthur was incredible as well; I enjoyed him more than Molly, for some reason. Maybe this is because I don't see the Molly in here become Molly Weasley, the affectionate mother of seven kids. But I am pretty sure that reality can always get in the way of making a dreamy story like this one continue to be dreamy until it's end.

All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed the story! It was a wonderful read and I'm very happy I got to come across it. Well done and thank you for requesting!

-Manno

Author's Response: Hey there and thankyou for being kind enough to leave such a lovely review! So sorry it's taken me this long to reply!

Haha yeah- I've never written Molly/Arthur before, so I really wanted to get them right! I think they're such a fun pairing.

I'm glad you liked the opening because I did wonder at points if it was a little too fluffy. I just couldn't resist Cousin Florence's shoes either!
I'm so glad the change of character is alright, because I was quite unsure about it. It makes me really happy that you think I kept the same dreamy feel throughout!

Aww thankyou so much! I really enjoy writing from the perspective of children, so I'm glad Molly came off alright! I'm pleased that you liked Arthur because I found him much harder to write.
Hmmm yeah- it's an interesting point about the Molly in here compared to the Molly in the books... I just had this idea that she might've been a bit more fun-loving in her younger years so I though I'd try and explore that!

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a kind and helpful review! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the story!

-Bethany


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