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Review:academica says:
Yellow! Here from Review Tag! :)

D'aww, angsty James trying to talk himself out of being in love with his best friend. I can see why it's so tough, since he finally got the girl after all that time. He tells himself all the things he can't tell Sirius, and moreover, that he can't tell Lily. I really liked the jaunty feel of the piece, and I felt like the language you used worked well with the mood.

I would consider maybe moving your author's note to the end of the story, though. I got almost all the way through the first time thinking it was Sirius laying there with Lily, and then I had to read it again to get it. Maybe you intended some ambiguity, or I'm simply not observant enough?

Nicely done! Glad to have read another of yours!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! :D

He is cute when he's torn. Everyone in the Marauder era in general are so much fun to torture.
I wanted to keep this light-ish, seeing as James doesn't really have the potential for super-intense-soul-destroying-angst as, say, Remus or Snape. So I'm glad it worked for you.

I will at some point edit this properly, so that the note and the fic are kept separate; it's just that I published this on my phone, which is a bit awkward to do. Sorry about that.
I have this weird habit of rarely referring to my characters by their names, just so the reader can get into their heads properly before imposing their own feelings associated with the character onto my fic. If that makes any sense at all. So yeah, I guess it was intentional.

Thank you so much for your review! :)


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