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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Hi there again! Sorry for the delay, things just got a little mental over the weekend.

I loved this chapter, I thought it was great you gave a real insight into Regulus's conflicted emotions and portrayed that very well. I loved this line particularly, it was brilliant: "Even though they didn't see eye to eye, they were still brothers nonetheless. Sirius had been a senseless idiot at times, but having him around meant that it took the pressure off Regulus to be perfect." - that was such a great line, because even though Regulus is mad at Sirius you still see elements of that brotherly relationship that Regulus won't openly admit. He likes Sirius, deep down, but comments like the one above is as close as he will get to voicing such feelings.

I really liked the end where the two boys have dreams and Regulus's leads him to smash up Sirius's room, and Sirius's leaves him with a terrible pain in his heart that he cannot explain. (oh yeah, James falling back asleep instead of going on a walk to talk to Sirius is spot on characterisation, just perfect!)

The only problem I could spot was with this line: "we would love nothing more than to join in his ranks." - yeah, it was just the word "love". I am not sure that it fits here, just death eaters using that word doesn't seem likely, especially because Voldemort does not see any value in it and despises it in a way. Maybe say something like "nothing would give us greater pleasure than joining his ranks" - something like that maybe?

Anyway, I really like this chapter, it's very good, keep it up, looking forward to reading chapter three now, I'm really interested to see where you go with this! :)

Author's Response: Again, I have taken time to think about how I want to respond to your wonderful reviews! I always try to make sure that I cover every point brought up and sometimes an immediate response doesn't happen right away.

I am super happy to hear that you liked Regulus's string of conflict. You hit the nail right on the head when you say that he likes Sirius, but won't verbally admit it to anyone and not to mention that he has a hard enough time admitting it to himself. He strives to be different from his brother, but it sort of feels like that he wants so much to be able to look up to him. It's that classic love/hate relationship.

I am glad that the dreams between the two boys worked. I wanted to really show their differences, but show how they were connected at the same time. Hahahaha James! I loved writing that because it is totally something that he would do. Whenever I think of him I always think of Severus saying that James was lazy. Not in a bad way, but a litterally I don't have to be anywhere so why do I have to be up early kind of way. :)

You know...I have never even thought of that being off like that. Now that you mention it I couldn't see Lucius saying Love. Hahaha!! It doesn't fit at all and I will have to change that!

Again, Thank you for all of your awesome feedback and terrific reviews! I look forward to seeing what else you think about the next two chapters.

-SR17


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