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Review:caoty says:
Hey, it's me with your requested review.

So first off, yay for goblin feminism! You've put in one of those logic bombs from canon and you've handled it well... as well as setting up that Devil-Wears-Prada-esque disappointment at the end, which was way fun.

Speaking of canon, Theo Nott as a swimsuit photographer who's interested in goblin women's rights movements is fantastic. I still can't imagine it. But it totally is. And I hope to see Pansy in the WW offices at some point; I'd love to see how you'd handle her.

I'm not quite sure what Edie's problem with Rose is exactly - I assume it's jealousy quadrupled by her hangover, but I think it'd be worth emphasising the hangover bit because otherwise Edie comes off a little bit mean.
And you've got a fair few Americanisms in there, like Social Security, so maybe you should invest in a beta to Britpick or maybe look at that slang thread in the forums.

All in all, this is very fun so far, and I can't wait 'til we meet Oliver! :)

Author's Response: Hello again. :)

Theo, Theo, Theo. Honestly I had him as a minor OC until I remembered there was already somebody named Theo within canon ;) It's been a really long time since I've read the books, or even seen any of the movies. All I could glean from the Lexicon was that he was a Slytherin who mainly kept to himself, so I thought it would be fun to put him in here and see where he was post-graduation.

I will certainly go back to edit Edie's opinion of Rose, as you're not the first person to mention it. I was trying to convey a basic personality clash, plus Edie is pretty jealous. I mean, Rose has Edie's dream job (though maybe not with Witch Weekly) and is pretty ungrateful. ;)

I really thought about getting a Beta Reader, but from what I could see lurking on the forums, there aren't many people around offering their services any more. I'll definitely check back though.

Thanks so much for your input. I live for this stuff! ;)

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