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Review:academica says:
Hello, I'm here from Review Tag! (Thanks for tagging me before, by the way! I take ages to respond to reviews because of my busy schedule, but I do reply.)

This is a really interesting look at Regulus's last few moments. He experienced a really horrid type of drowning with the Inferi playing a part, and I've always kind of wondered what he must have felt like and what he must have thought about in those final moments. I think it's fitting that he worried a little about Kreacher, and yet he didn't worry too much to where he didn't still seem like a Black.

I loved that you mentioned Sirius. This, especially:

Instead he gave me a long, sad look. As he turned and walked away he spoke the last words I would ever hear from him. "This will be the death of you, Regulus."

How right he was.

That totally broke my heart. I also liked how Regulus knew that Sirius's heart was too hard to mourn him, as sad as it was for me to read. You've done a great job with the emotion in this short piece.

I noticed a couple technical errors I thought I would comment on. One, 'bony' is spelled without the 'e.' Also, it seemed like you switched tenses frequently from present to past and back, especially in the beginning. If I were you, I'd read back through this and choose one to stick with.

It's so interesting how Regulus had such a positive outlook on his death. It's like he said--the price for being young forever was having to die young. More than that, though, it's clear that his victory over Voldemort means more to him than his own life, than almost anything he has to give up.

Great job! Good luck in the challenge :)


Author's Response: I don't know why, but I always end up changing tenses throughout my stories. >.> I even went back and edited just for that reason before I posted and I still didn't catch them all XD Lol, but I went through again and I think I got majority of them! ^_^

And thank you for the review! I really appreciate it!

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