|Review:||Gabriella Hunter says:|
Oh, my goodness! I was really worried about Lou in the previous chapter but goodness! And you say I torture MY females! Bravo, my dear. ;)
Anyway, I really loved Lou's thought process. It was clear that she didn't really want to go on the date and she was obsessing over the tiniest little things and I just found that oddly hilarious and cute. The fact that she lied on Frankie and ignored James who, oddly enough didn't really notice that she and Rob were on a date, was too funny but I felt for her. I know what that's like, seeing someone you love with someone else and I thought you played on that very well. And Alice and Jamsie (Shudder) aren't really in what I'd call a "relationship" but don't tell her that! Loved the way you described Madame Puddifoot's, it sounds just as terrible as I'd imagined.*shudders*
Anyway, I thought Rob was really adorable and I was sort of rooting for him to make a move on Lou and just when things are going all right--Potterhead!!! Argh, what in the world was James thinking? My jaw dropped! And Lou of course was rightfully angry and upset about the whole situation but James has that way of melting her heart and that actually might be a problem. The poor thing! And poor Rob! I hope his face is all right! D':
And ALICE. Really?! If I'd been Lou, I would have lit into her and told her a thing or two but she's not nearly as mean as I am. >:(
I don't like her being upset!
But it was excellent! I didn't see any grammar things and I really loved your pacing and the awkwardness of the situation. Your twist and turning with the emotions is grand! :D
Can't wait for Twist of Fate btw, I've been itching to know what happens with that! :D
Let's see. After Albus, its Abandon and you'll get more Benjamin and then...I don't even know. :p
Hahha. I'll let you know on the forums!
This was an amazing read!
Author's Response: Why hello there Gabbie,
We really are cruel to our girls aren't we... And this isn't even the worst of it, I have much more in store for poor Eloise.
Oh she was determined to go on the date, she just started freaking out because... well she's been in love with our Jamsie for quite a while now and it was a bit daunting trying to get over him. She was nervous! She had never been on a date before! Ah Frankie, I sometimes wonder if she is the only sane one in the dorm. Not that Frankie is sane in the slightest.
Oh James. The thought of Eloise going on a date would never have even occured to him... and he's not very observant either, which doesn't help. Oh Alice and James' 'realtionship' is really a bit onesided, James isn't really aware they are that serious yet, but it still hurt Eloise to see them together. Even if she does try to be happy for them. The girl is too saint like.
Madame Pudifoots! I wouldn't go near that place with a ten foot broomstick! It sounds horrific!
Ah Rob, isn't he awesome? He fancies her so much and she doesn't even realise... But Potterhead! I think it is safe to say, James was NOT thinking at the time. I think most jaws in Madame Pudifoots dropped as well, don't worry. And as for James' habit of melting Eloise's heart... That is something she really cannot help. The guy will be the death of her. You'll see Rob soon, never fear, and his face will get better. I was rather angry with James for temporarily ruining it for us.
Alice. Alice. Alice. Don't worry, I would have screamed at Alice well before now, Eloise is just too nice for her own good. But wasn't Alice out of line? Snapping at her best friend? Bros before hoes and all that jazz?
Awh, thank you so much! ToF will be a relatively long chapter (not as long as yours tend to be though) so you'll have a nice chunk to read when I finally finish and post it. Can't wait for more from you... See you on the forums (or come see my blog ;) ) and thank you so much again, you're amazing,
P.S. sorry this is so long, I got a bit carried away.