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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba back again.

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter! I think my favorite part is the very funny conversation between Edie and Mildred, as Edie tries to explain the flask of pain-reliever. Her conversations with Mr. Ward were funny, as well, and I really like the bit about the female Goblins' protest.

Your grammar, spelling and punctuation are very clean overall. However, I found one very minor typo, "would" is repeated in this sentence: "There are, quite literally, thousands of other young women in London who would would like to have your position." Not a big deal, obviously. :)

I am a little confused in regards to Edie's true feelings about Rose. It seems obvious that she envies her job, but is she also jealous of Rose for liking Theo, and for catching Seamus's attention? I couldn't think why else she would make a big deal about the cake and then tell Seamus that she's a lesbian. :)

Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Hello, hello, hello!

Thanks for pointing out that typo--it's definitely in a more significant location in terms of story dialogue so I'll really have to fix that.

And as I mentioned in another review response, I'm going to try and better explain Edie's opinion of Rose. Basically it's a personality clash, and Edie is of course extremely jealous of the girl who has a journalism career and is ungrateful when she's been handed extra writing assignments. ;)

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your offer to review.

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