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Review:ohmymerlin says:
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This was a really good one-shot! I've never seen a fic about Sirius on Halloween, so kudos for originality!

I think you really got Sirius' personality but I felt like a lot of the dialogue was very formal. I don't think Sirius would have been very polite when he ripped the Fat Lady's portrait up, so that may be a thing to work on. :)

Also, you said that he apparated to the Shrieking Shack. But the Shrieking Shack was a part of Hogwarts, and in Hogwarts you can't apparate or disapparate. Also, I don't think Sirius had a wand, his wand would have been taken off him when he went to Azkaban. Unless he did have a wand in the books, then feel free to ignore me if that's the case! :p

Other than that, it was a really good one-shot and I really enjoyed reading it! Good job! :D

Author's Response: Hi and thank you for the review! =)

The Shrieking Shack is actually in Hogsmeade, so apparating there shouldn't be a problem for wizards and since Sirius spent so much time in there during his teenage years, it's more than likely that he could apparate there because of his memories.

There's no canon information about what happened to Sirius's wand. I thought about this issue while writing the one-shot and decided that since he had almost three months after his escape from Azkaban (before this fic begins), he had plenty of time to acquire some kind of wand for himself. He was quite bright after all.

Thanks for reading it. Glad you enjoyed it! =)

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