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Review:NerdyTeddy says:
First of all, this is really good.
But you need to do some major editing. Though there are no spelling mistakes (that I've noticed) you tend to write longer sentences that don't make sense.
Also, the gaps between each paragraph are huge. The story is about 1/4 of the sidebar length, but you add heaps by unnecessary spacing. This annoys the Hades out of me.
Overall, however, the plot is interesting and the characters memorable. Has Aurora spoken to the boys since first year? I recall you saying that she was a social recluse...
It's good enough to make me read each new chapter, but edit so that you don't just ramble on about insignificant nonsense (an example of this would be in the first chapter when you explained the appearance of angels and gods. Too much detail, didn't really make sense).

Author's Response: Oh god I looked at the gaps in the paragraphs, that is horrible I am so sorry. I was writing in a different program and I copied it here and never checked to be sure it was in a proper format. I'm sorry about the hassle. I did a rough edit of the first chapter and I do see what you were talking about, sorry I was very young and this is the first story I've written. Thank you for the feedback, I hope I have made positive changes.

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