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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba here with your requested review!

So, first of all, I like how well you establish the opposite natures of your two main characters through their vastly different morning routines. I think cross-cutting the POVs worked well for this introductory chapter. It'll be cool to see how each character views the other once they clash at school. :)

I also like how you use details like the harsh alarm clock to show that Max lives in a muggle-ish house, while Binky's presence shows that Elizabeth likely lives in a pureblood household.

I think it's really interesting that Elizabeth trusts Binky more than her parents, and like the fact that her whole family isn't depicted as being perfect. I think the coldness of her parents and Liam's needs help to explain why she tries so hard to be perfect herself. When Elizabeth says "It was like they didn't care," I wonder whether this is really the case, or if they just have a poor way of showing that they care?

Liam's illness is really interesting as well (although sad) since there weren't many magical illnesses portrayed in the books. I'm curious to see how it will progress throughout the story.

Oh, and I love that the muggle and wizard sides of Max's family get along! I hope David shows up again. :)

Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm glad it was so easy to tell the characters apart, I was a little worried about that.

Your assumptions about the characters are pretty much spot on. I'm glad that I was able to show these things without breaking Elizabeth's character. I was really worried that her overly proper portrayal would lose some of the depth of her character.

David definitely comes back, but I had to edit it so he is no longer a muggle. He has lived like one for most of his life though. The storyline didn't work otherwise. :/

Thank you so much for your time. It was hugely appreciated :D


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