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Review:water_lily43175 says:
Ah yes, we were in Manchester with some baddies, weren't we? EXCITING. There was a fleeting moment here where - well, I didn't FORGET, but it wasn't at the forefront of my mind that Kingsley was an Auror and Tobias was an Enforcer. It was a bit of an "oh yeah!" moment when that was mentioned. SILLY ME.

'I doubt Avery's that dumb,' said Tobias. 'But if he is, then Sweeney's got a nice new coat.' I LOVE this line. It's of the best things about your writing; even in fighting scenes, the humour isn't forgotten. LOVE IT.

Vaughn seriously has a knack of turning up at the right time, eh? Well, I say the RIGHT time, he could have been a bit quicker, and it would have saved Toby's leg from being stood on! But he gets there just in time. Oh, and Kingsley with his politician speak, bless him. He's a natural in the job! And I love Tobias's minor dislike for Vaughn and his sharp tongue. Bless him.

Oh my, Tanith in a negligee. Ariane strikes again! Oh. OH. The Chinese food - of course, Toby doesn't know about David yet. THAT will be an interesting conversation if it ever crops up. Flustered Tobias' thought process is hilarious, bless him. And OH GOOD GOD his leg gets in the way. That is so TYPICAL! Now I'm crying with frustration, haha. If it's not one thing it's another! BUT, at least they've got time together, and they're TALKING, as they've observed. Savour every moment, kids. You know, I twigged something the other day - these guys are younger than me. That's such a weird thought!

ANYWAY, loved the chapter, obviously. Nice bit of fighting at the beginning, good that everyone survived it, and also nice that Toby's tactical skills come into play a bit here. And HUGE thumbs up for the T/T of course. Possibly a good thing that Toby's leg distracted them because they possibly need to do more talking first, but then at the same time the worry about Toby dying clearly spurred Tanith on and I'm more than slightly concerned that in different circumstances she's going to freak out like she did with David. Not sure. And, of course, that little reminder that she HAS got a lot that she still needs to talk to Toby about. Exciting stuff!

Author's Response: Yeah, Manchester with baddies, just a little deal! ;) I know what you mean about forgetting Kingsley and Tobias' past - especially Tobias. He's in politics after a year of running the newspaper; that he was an Enforcer, if only for a few months, is easily forgotten. It's also not the world's *biggest* advantage right now because it was a while ago, for a short time, and he's suffered a crippling injury since then. These DE's are perfectly capable of taking on experienced, fully-trained Aurors. Tobias is not fully qualified to be here. But he does have a bit of an edge!

Yeah, that's my characters, humorous even in the middle of a catastrophe. I wonder if they're trying to avoid having an honest emotional reaction to anything?? And no, Vaughn and Toby won't like each other much even if they're saving one another. They're on the same side, but come at it from too different directions.

Yep. This is all Ariane's fault. Also, apparently Chinese Food is the heralding of Tanith's Awkward Intimacy Issues - not that they raised there head here YET but you're right, they could have done. I must admit I'm a bit smug at this review; you're right, just because fear of Toby's death managed to put her at ease for one night, doesn't mean everything's better or been swept under the carpet. I'm glad that I'm getting across the nuances of this kind of contradictory state of mind properly! They still have a long way to go, and a whole lot more talking that needs doing.

Thanks for reviewing!

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