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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Hello (:.

So, I'm confused, yet intrigued at the same time. Confused because I started reading with the impression that it was a Next Generation story, and so when I saw the name Lily Evans, I thought it was just someone with the same name as James II's dead grandmother. Ha. But then I saw Sirius, and so my confusion just tripled. I don't want to assume anything, so I'm just going to have to keep reading, aye?

Confusion aside, it's an interesting start. I like Tea, and her back-story gives me a chuckle. Just the fact that her parents named her after something they despise is amusing. I like that she's a superstitious klutz. Her thought process is really funny, and I really do feel that you have an interesting character on your hands.

James asking Tea to be his girlfriend is just really suspicious to me. If he's been infatuated with Lily for so long, why is he suddenly asking out Tea? I mean, even Tea realises that Lily is the object of James's obsession, so I feel that he hasn't given Tea any reason to think that he likes her? It's all so sudden, I presume, so it has me really suspicious. (James Potter, I'm watching you. You better not be trying to use Tea to get to Lily.)

But yes. You're a really good writer. There are a few errors here and there, but they don't take away from the flow.

Interesting (I've used that word a lot, huh?) start, and I can't wait to read what comes next.

Leigh

Author's Response: Hello!

How funny is it? Every single one of my reviews make me jump for joy. And here I have two! Needless to say, I resemble a silly baboon right now.

Many have said that they're confused with the story's data. That, I must point it out, is the whole point. And i'm glad you decided to keep reading. Welcome to the ride.

I'am happy you chuckled. I learnt somewher that everytime a human laughs, a fairy is born. So chuckling is good. Keep at it. As for Tea's superstitious klutzyness...you've haven't yet been hit with the full force of it. ;)

You'll get your answers with the next chapter. And don't worry about James. He's a good guy at heart, but love makes us act like fools. :D

Thank you. I will get to fixing the errors soon.

Have a great day, Leigh.
Cheers,
-Akansha.

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