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Review:SereneChaos says:
You know, I've always wanted to read a Dean/Luna (in my head, they're totally Duna, haha) and am so glad to have found my first one! :) I really like the dialogue here--everyone speaks so naturally!

I do think this could be improved a bit by having Dean's sudden interest in Luna not be from her newfound appearances. It serves a dual purpose: giving you a chance to get in deep and explore their personalities more, and to give your readers a chance to really see and believe why Luna and Dean would be such a great couple. I also would like to know where in the HP timeline this takes place--is it after DH?

Otherwise, I noticed you have quite a rich vocabulary, in terms of knowing other ways to say the word 'said'. I think they were all really well placed.

You're off to a good start!

Author's Response: Thanks :) bit late but yeah :D

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