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Review:javct says:
javct45 here with your requested review!
I do apologize for taking so long - school just started this week and it just hit me (and I crawled in a hole and ignored life :P)

Anyway. I do agree with you that Edie has the potential to become a Mary Sue BUT ONLY IF YOU LET HER! Anyone can avoid their heroine become Mary Sue as long as they watch her carefully but I do think that you won't let that happen; with your writing talent and so far, she seems really good. I love reading about girls that have guy friends of whom they do not harbour "feelings" for. I'm really interested to see how their relationships pan out in the next few chapters :)

Comedy: I can't comment much on it in this chapter because it is mainly just introducing the characters; that, and I don't read much humor but if the characters say in with the personalities that you have blessed them with then I am sure that the comedy will be really good :) I did, however, like this line: "May we never have office jobs, may our futures be full of nights forgotten by morning, and most importantly, may we always get laid." it really made me laugh!

In which chapter are you going to introduce Oliver? (may I ask?). I am defiantly eager to know what happens in the next few chapters (I want to meet her boss; for some reason she reminds me a lot of Miranda Presely if you have ever seen "The Devils Wears Prada")

Good job and good luck on your future chapters!
Jasmine, x

Author's Response: Hello! No problem; I know what you mean about life getting in the way.

Thanks for all of your comments in my areas of concern, and I appreciate you taking the time to judge its value as a comedy even though you don't typically read them.

Certainly you may ask about Oliver's introduction. We first meet him in chapter three (which I know is a wait for some people, but I'm a sucker for backstory.) Then from there on out he'll be in the story for good!

Also, I really wanted Edie's boss to be like Miranda Presely because I freaking love Meryl Streep. But I was afraid of making this too similar, and I also really liked the idea of her boss as kind of an idiot male, so I came up with Mr. Ward. You get a nice little dose of him in chapter two ;)

Again, thanks so much for stopping by to read my story!


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