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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba here!

First of all, this line made me laugh out loud: "Yes, I have decided I want to be called Mr. Hooves but Peter and Sirius don't agree with me." I think I agree with Peter and Sirius. :)

Another thing that I really, really like is the interior dialog between Remus and his wolf persona near the end: "'Pack?' I heard my wolfish side ask. He sounded hopeful, despite being used to spending his nights alone from the very beginning it seemed that his wolf wanted the company."

One thing that I'm a little confused about was the attack: "...Wolf barely had time to register the attack coming from his side. He landed hard on the dry ground with a yelp as a jagged rock dug past his thick, tawny coat cutting him deeply on his back." Does the attack "from his side" refer to the rock thrown by the boy? Or is this when James jabs him with his antlers? James apologizes for it later, but I couldn't find where it happened in the story. This isn't a huge deal, but it stuck out. :)

So far I think you're doing a great job of distinguishing the Marauders from each other in their behavior and dialog. I'm interested to see what other trouble they'll get into together. :)

Author's Response: Waaah!! I'm like 11 days late to respond to this! what happened to me? Hahaha! I'm so sorry!!

Haha, I'm thrilled that you liked that line. It always made me chuckle. Mostly because I just know that they just didn't come up with the names right away. It is something that took a bit of time for them to settle on a name that they all liked.

Wolf and Remus have somewhat of a strange friendship mostly due to the fact that they're forced to BE in that situation. They both know that they both need to co-operate in order to function. In the end I wanted to give Remus this hope and light at the end of the tunnel. He'll be there more than once in this story and both him and his Wolf will need that light to help them out until the bitter end.

The jab comes from the previous chapter where James hits him when Wolf launched at them and managed to knock Wolf back against the wall.

I'm glad that you think I've given the Marauders a personality. Specially Peter whom is the hardest for me to write due to his persona.

Thank you so much for reading! :D I appreciate your review and I hope to see you soon!!! :D

--Rosie

p.s. again, so sorry for the delay!


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