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Review:Debra20 says:
Hey there. Thanks for joining my challenge!

"I wanted him to stay alive; he could not join her as the other man she loved had and her best friends had and her son surely would, even if it were for the briefest of seconds" - I liked how this sounded like if Snape died, he would not be able to go in Heaven, or whatever the place was where Lily lived her afterlife. It gave a tone of sweet sadness to Snape's whole situation and the hurtful fact that even after he died, he wouldn't be able to spend time with Lily.

I enjoyed the interactions between Lily and James and how she tried to shake him off at the beginning. But at the same time it would have been refreshing to see only the two of them talking (Lily and Snape). I understand James' concern but she came to greet Snape in his passage to the afterlife and yet James had to stick close. Why doesn't he leave her be even after they died? They should have had enough proof while they were alive that she was quite capable to taking care of herself. At least that's how I imagined her to be. Capable of looking out for her well being without anyone's help.

Apart from a few misspells I enjoyed reading this fic. I have troubled feelings on Lily's behavior though. She sounded very selfish to me in this one shot. She came to see Snape when he died, to be with him, but she was the one that ended up pushing him away and hurting him. I imagined she could have found a better, softer way to make him realize the truth of her feelings once and for all. I think she was a little too brutal for how we know Lily was.

I would also be a bit wary about Snape's characterization. Even if he dies, I always thought he wouldn't immediately change his thoughts and behavior pattern. I thought there should have been more interaction between Lily and Snape for him to break down and cry.

All in all I was very glad to have had the chance of reading your thoughts on their re-encounter. Thanks for writing this!

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